1. My name is Yong Wook, Oh.
2. My friends in US call me Chris.
3. I live in Bundang.
4. I have a younger sister who always argues with me...
5. My dad is very very good at sports.
6. I like to play any kind of sports.
7. I always lose to my dad.......
8. I enjoy playing basketball in KMLA.
9. I am the SNIPER of 15th wave Crossover..^^
10. I like Kobe Bryant the most.
11. I don't like math.
12. I like science.
13. I am very tired these days doing lots of work...
14. I hate morning exercise.
15. Morning exercise multiplies my tiredness.
16. I like everything in KMLA except morning exercise.
17. I like trying new stuff.
18. I started to play basketball in KMLA.
19. My hate towards started to decrease in KMLA.
20. I am very optimistic.
21. The best choice I made was to come to KMLA.
22. I enjoy my life here in KMLA.
23. There is nothing that can replace my friends.
24. There were some moments that I faced hardships.
25. Finally, I got out of them successfully.
26. I don't like retreating back.
27. Thus, I just keep going on, only looking forward.
28. I will never give up!
29. I usually sleep for a very long time.....
30. I am happy now and I will be the happiest person in the world!!^^
Some good stuff in this list, but it is a bit blended together so I don't have many specific numbers which I think have potential for an essay. But I do think, perhaps, your positive outlook on life could be attributed to your close relationship with your dad and how sports metaphorically has come to represent many things in your life. The danger of this kind of essay is that it's very cliche - and far too many college essays etc. are written about father/son relationships and sports. I read more than a few last year. So, it's okay to write about these things but the trick is to do it creatively. I'd start with an active personal narrative about a moment you shared with your dad on a basketball court - with nice descriptions, and then some sort of lesson learned kind of thing. That's just one impression I can draw from your list. I like your list but it could use some more distinctive nuggets.
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